First, let me say this again. Before you put your book on Amazon, please get an editor. No book is going to be 100% perfect. However it shouldn’t be completely littered with issues.
Just because you have a thesaurus doesn’t mean you need to use every single word in it.
The word ‘said’ is a perfectly acceptable dialogue tag. It’s not necessary to use every possible tag except said.
If you are going to use an adverb to infer rapid movement, the word ‘quickly’ is fine. You don’t need to use ‘expeditiously’ when describing how the character walked down the sidewalk.
Please, for the love all that’s holy and unholy, if your characters are in an intimate scene remember the guy can shout, yell, scream but do not used ‘he ejaculated’ as a dialogue tag. It does not work in that kind of scene.
And while I’m up here on…
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